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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 2:08 pm

And we get mad at a genin who can delete atoms... this guy has an awful lot of stuff. You can direct your attention here Domo.

Best part about it is... he isnt done lol
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 2:11 pm

Ooookay, This genin has some......well, alot of stuff to work out. Mahk-x you can tell him what needs toning and what not.
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 2:13 pm

Well... perhaps, to give you something to aspire too Vaxiclex, can you unlock two of the 6 abillities?
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 2:20 pm

Mahk-X, I am working on it... I was saving this guy for last since he seemed like a lot of shit to read and apparently it is... Currently reading it actually.

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WTF.... Dude what is this load of bullshit... I'm sorry but even I can't have anything to say to this load of bull. It seems like every god hack power combined into one. But I will earnstly tell you what's wrong with this without much bias. Like I said much bias so excuse me for calling your jutsu list bullshit. I will edit more as I read more and explain more of what I find wrong or needs to be toned down. Of course this is my opinion and might be disregard by you, but if the Higher ups agree then I suggest you change them.

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- First Ability: Chrono Energy Manipulation - Lets me manipulate time but only mildly. I can increase my speed and things like that. I can also, by using a lot of chakra, manipulate my opponents speed. A ability is that if my comrade lets me, I can easily manipulate their speed.
- Second Ability: Elementalist - I am an elementalist after unlocking this. I have all types of chakra elements.
- Third Ability: Lightning Dominance - Gives me nearly full domination over the lightning element. It also increases my speed by a lot.
- Fourth Ability: Atomic Eye - An eye that lets me see atoms and lets me touch and do things with them such as change appearances. Also it lets me control molecules but that take a lot out of me and also spreads pain in my eyes and throughout my body.

1.) I have no problem with it to this extent. But if it reaches to the realm of how Xzystins, Kham, and Rion I suggest an immediate tone done and stick to speed and only speed to avoid any arguments, since time itself is a very controversial power of being able to resverse, playback, fast forward, stop, travel, and so forth.

2.) I'm tired of Genin elementalist popping out of no where, this is the biased part in case you were wondering, I have no problem with it so far that. But upon further inspection you really do not know how to limit yourself.

3.) Lighting is technically under the branch of being an Elementalist, well a good one at least.

4.) No way in hell, I don't care if it does wreak immense havoc to your body, being able to control and distort an object by fucking with their atoms is just wrong.

Like stated earlier I will add on more.

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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 3:00 pm

This guy definitely needs toning down I agree, but this is a LOT to take care of. I'll just leave it up to Domo to figure out what needs to get edited or omitted...
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 3:08 pm

Dammit... Fine.. I'll get started on the list...

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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 6:09 pm

Here's the thing... It seems to me that you seemed to take almost every good thing trait from separate characters from the site, I may be wrong but that's how it seems to be to me. Also, please do not take this too harshly, I'm not trying to suffocate your creativeness rather limit you till further notice, Meaning you could just take out some moves temporarily till you hit a higher rank.
You did take out the stuff I suggested and I appreciate that but on the other hand you haven't looked over your entire jutsu list completely.
There are many things you could use to tone down and I would say your jutsu list would be that of an Anbu's at this point because not many people around your level would be able to deal with type of moves.

The elemental wolf summons seem fine to me, but this is a suggestion I would consider you following: Start off with 2 elements and ask an elemental master to train you in the other "Basic Elements". I only say this because of the people complaining, myself, about genin elementalist when people have worked and earned for their elements. Of course you don't have to take my advice but I would have no problem helping you learn/regain the elements you so require if you choose to take this course of action.

1.)Your Transportation
I'm pretty sure there was a ban on warping, dimensions, and the use of dimensions because of Tigen ((Only person allowed to use dimensional/dimension energy because of Nightmare)) but you might want to clarify with Lucius.
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2.)Fire Element - Impressive btw
- Flame Metal Skin - Smoke poof's around me and as it goes a way a mithril Flaming armor appears on me, protecting me from taijutsu and ninjutsu.

That will be toned down to where it reduces the damage taken but not protecting you completely, sorry if that was your intention but if it is more description for your opponents would be nice.

- Demon Shuriken Blast - Makes 100,000 demonic flaming shurikens attack opponent.

This is going to take a shit load of chakra considering they might small because they're shurikens doesn't hide the fact that they add up and create a toll on your overall chakra.
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3.)Water Element
- Ultimate Water Form - I can use all the moisture/water in the area as my weapon. If there is a puddle under you I can manipulate the water and wrap it around the opponent. I can also freeze the opponent. ((This jutsu is also associated with the wind element.))

Make a specific radius around yourself that this is applicable, 10 meters should be a nice number, and increase the range as you rank. But you will not and cannot control the entire atmosphere's moisture/water in the area otherwise you'll deplete your chakra. Your max range ,as in when you hit Sannin and if you're good enough, is probably around 10 miles.
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4.) Earth Element
-Earth Barrage - Thousands of earth spikes come out of the ground, trying to pierce the opponent.

Just reduce the number of earth spikes, it applies exactly like the fire shurikens.
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5.) Lightning Element
- Raikiri - A stronger and faster version of chidori.
Just remove this for now and add it later when you have a higher rank.

- Electa Wolves - I send wolves of lightning at the opponent. If touched, the opponent will be severely chocked and also numb. They move at the speed of lightning.

Not every one can match the speed of lightning, which is approximately the speed of light and I will elaborate that further when I hit that section.
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6.) Wind Element

No problems with wind
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- Dark Blast - Sends a giant and very fast beam of darkness at the opponent.

Try reduce the size of the beam to save chakra.
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8.) Light
- Celestial Burst - Send light chakra all over my body. The light is very hot and can melt many things such as objects 100x the strength of steel. My speed also increases to that of 3/4 of light speed. ((The speed part is only +1/4 of light speed right now since I'm a genin.))
- Light Wolves - I send out wolves of the light element. They are very hot and can run as fast as the speed of light. There main purpose is to confuse the opponent by moving very fast and burning the opponent by the heat of the light.

The thing I suggest is the speed of light... No one is going to like a genin able to zip around at the speed of light, even your reduced form of 3/4 the speed of light or 299,337,984 meters/second, which is still surpasses the speed of sound. Indeed this would be able for an elemental master but you should probably reduce the speed to 1/1,000,000 the speed of light which should put you at around 299 meters per second which is still fast, and then you can take away one zero each time you rank up that get's you closer to the speed of light.

Example:
Genin: 1/1,000,000 of 299,337,984 meters/second = 299 meters/second
Chunin: 1/100,000 of 299,337,984 meters/second = 2,993 meters/second
Sp. Jounin: 1/10,000 of 299,337,984 meters/second = 29,933 meters/second
Jounin: 1/1,000 of 299,337,984 meters/second = 299,337 meters/second
Anbu: 1/100 of 299,337,984 meters/second = 2,993,379 meters/second
Sanin: Speed of light = 299,337,984 meters/second

Reasonable yes? Which also relates to the Electa Wolves moving at the speed of lightning.
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9.) Magma

No problems
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10.) Ice
- Iced Territory - I slam my palm onto the ground and the whole ground becomes icy.

Wait till a higher rank, I recommend Sp. Jounin
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11.) Non-Elemental
- Chakra Absorption - It lets me absorb chakra by touching the other person, even if touched slightly.

Specify the amount you absorb. if not take it off otherwise people will complain of being god hacking by a simple punch or grab to drain most of their chakra. And should be removed till you hit a higher rank, as said by Akarui, Sp. Jounin and only when you find someone to teach that tech to you. If that person isn't found to teach you, I would find it reasonable to remove it till further notice.
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12.) Medical Technique

This should be removed until you learn it for me or Kama.
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13.) Summoning Technique
- Enlightening Bird Flock - I can summon a flock of birds with the light element. They come in sizes of 1 cm to 120 in. They use the light element to shoot out strong light attacks and also make a light place dark. There attacks are strong enough to over power other light attacks (Making there attack stronger) and overpower/destroy dark element attacks. They can also shoot out light and the light will heal the person. They can also go close up and use there chakra to heal me/someone by touching them with it (kind of like healing palm). They can also throw a type of liquid from there mouth. The liquid can either be acidic or it can heal. They (I) decide.

Don't allow your summons to heal till you learn to heal yourself. Also light can't really overpower another light, they merely pass through each other. But the acidic liquid is a nice touch.
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Those are my suggestions that you should change, to better you character as well as your RPing experience on Vescrutia.

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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 6:15 pm

Good god Domo you really waisted half the day on this guy jutsu?
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 6:17 pm

I was bored... And there was nothing wrong with helping someone fix their jutsu list so please don't call it a waste. I'm pretty sure you had a tough time RPing your first time and knowing what you can or can't do. If you didn't congrats on being perfect.

But try reading over it and see if my suggestions fit your qualifications since I don't seem to have authority as an Admin anymore.

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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 6:22 pm

Toche Domo. But Lets see here

The first I wanted to kno is the whole chakra absorbtion thing shouldnt he wait till he get a higer rank like sp. jonin before even attempting to absorb chakra from someone else?

And that water element te whole can manipulate the water around me and use it as a weapon is a bit much for a genin to me but someone can over rule me but other wise nice job
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 6:30 pm

Alright I'll edit to add those suggestions.

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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 7:22 pm

Um, not to be rude or anything....but some of these moves I have, just to let you know.....like I have wolves of each element, and can combine the elements into almost any secondary element..., including lava, and ice....
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 7:24 pm

Thats the thing with elementalists, you must realize someone is always biting you that way, which is why I don't recommend them. Although, you are right about the wolf summons.
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 7:30 pm

I dont seem to remember anyone else before now that could mix the elements like me...Shiro never did, but thats fine I guess Rolling Eyes .................the wolves though, not so much happiness there..... :evil:
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 7:34 pm

Umm, lets see....Anyone who uses fire basically uses Lava, like all water users on this site can use ice as well. Combining elements is extremely simple, especially for any and all elementalists. Ask Domo to tell him to...wait, you could ask Vax your self.
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 8:26 pm

Ok, ok, just as long as you dont start combining all of them......and change the wolf thing too please....
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 8:36 pm

I can combine elements.... I just choose not to at least not for easy matches.

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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 8:42 pm

Ok, just trying to protect my moves, and I understand the elemental thing, just please dont use my wolves.....
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 8:43 pm

Good job domo...you are offically my most favorite depths higher up!
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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 8:58 pm

Just doing my job Mhak-X, and I do appreciate the appreciated
Also I understand Sirus that biting is a bitch, but it comes with being an elementalist like V said, since we can create and manipulate that specific element's form into whatever we see fit..

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PostSubject: Re: Vaxiclex's Jutsu and Abilities   June 11th 2009, 9:03 pm

I understand....
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